Melissa Darce’s story “She Doesn’t
Deserve My Sandwich” was funny and full of fresh ideas. I liked the idea of a
nosey fast food employee talking through the microphone to someone in the drive
through and trying to give life advice. I liked even more that the protagonist
took the advice and tried to save the relationship. Though the ideas were fresh
and funny, the delivery was lacking.
The Wendell Berry trend of writing
from the opposite sex’s point of view is getting old and I have still yet to
have seen it done well. Berry and other authors that have tackled the job of
writing for the opposite sex did a lot of work and research with that sex
before putting there stories out, and it showed in the details. In Darce’s
story, there was nothing to point to the fact that the speaker was a boy until
Darce mentioned it, and beyond that it was just an angry flat character that
had woman problems.
The dialogue wasn’t very believable
and again was very angry and straightforward the whole time coming from the
speaker. The dialect infused in the spelling of the words was also distracting
and the flatness and racism of the Asian character was insulting.
The main issue with the story was
the flatness of the characters. In order for the characters to be believable
and likeable or genuinely dislikeable they need to show characteristics of both
sides of the coin. If Lisa is supposed to be an annoying horrible girlfriend,
she needs to show at least some side of kindness and humanity. The Asian and
black characters can have thick accents if that’s what Darce wants, but by
making the Asian a stereotypical idiot it takes away from the believability of
the character and makes takes away from the story.
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