Thursday, March 21, 2013

Commentary on "Tutti Fucking Frutti" by Meryll Hall


“Tutti Fucking Frutti” by Meryll Hall was definitely a story for a select audience. With the crude bitchyness and choppy sentences and endless outside referneces, it was the kind of story that would be great for the people it would be great for but leave everyone else in the dust.
I liked the underlying theme of lonliness told through the unreliable narrator but I think it could be played up even more. With Andrea walking around downtown and then only getting absently invited by text last minute to a distant acquaintance’s house was a great way to start the desperate characterization.
As a story, I didn’t see any arch or any change in the character. She started as a bitch full of allusions of popularity awesomeness and ended the same way. In order for the story to be worth reading, even to the specific audience that would be interested in it, there needs to be a story.
Some of the details were pretty good, with the flask falling out of her purse and the wilted flowers and the separated liquors, but it seemed that the details were too exaggerated and I still didn’t feel like I ever knew where I was in the story.
The fact that only one side of Andrea is ever seen is also a problem. I finished the story impressed that Hall could think someone up so awful but was so disgusted with Andrea that I barely remembered what happened in the story. Even if she is going to remain awful and self obsessed, she needs just a tiny bit of humanity shown within the story. Maybe she loves animals or she takes care of her sick dad or anything that forces the reader to not want her chopped up and left in a black trash bag in the woods.
I liked the underlying theme of lonliness told through the unreliable narrator but I think it could be played up even more. With Andrea walking around downtown and then only getting absently invited by text last minute to a distant acquaintance’s house was a great way to start the desperate characterization.

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